4 thoughts on “Trying Haiku

  1. Good for a first attempt but when doing haiku the key element (other than 5 – 7 – 5 ) syllable structure is a movement from the external world to the internal world and sometimes back again, it’s like a snapshot of your insides and how they relate to the world. Here’s an example by myself even if of a bad quality.

    Dying willow trees
    I pass as I go fishing
    “Is the sea too cold?”

    Environment>subject>environment related to subject, while it’s not required to follow this path this kind of contrast is the key to haiku.

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